The Dream Catcher

The sun begins its sleep, signaling to me
time is short, ice cubes on heat-stricken
pavement.  The day must rest.  I heal,
forget, shade my mind from drudgery,
bosses, friends.  I put slumber to staff
meeting, deadlines, income tax.  My
somnabulent self is born, like a lion,
free from its cage.  The shadows lift
and I see myself - smile on face, fly-
rod in hand, water roars, my legs knife
the current, content with its cool ebb.
Stars shine on, I see more - grizzly
wades the rapids, drink sloshes into
walls of waves...Suddenly, line
tightens, rod bends, my hands tremble.
I feel its weight, strength, and know in
a short time, its mine.  But now I feel my
head pound and ears ring. The sun shines,
songbirds sing.  I sigh as I realize my catch
must wait for another night.

Very cool.  This time I caught the whole dream motiff, unlike last time when I thought it was a real occurance.  Don't know how I missed it before.  Very cool imagery. blah blah blah. hahaha.

No suggestions, no problems, EXCEPT you mispelled friend.  You forgot the I.  :)  No biggy of course, I am almost sure that motiff is spelled incorrectly.  Post the rest of your stuff man.  We need the activity!

I like this poem. The whole "after work/late night"style theme is terrific. At least that's how I see it. I may be way wrong. Oh well. I like the style used do to the fact it isn't normal style so much as line, line. etc, etc. If that makes sense good.Please do post the rest of your stuff. I would love to read it.

Very cool.  I like the discriptive, imagery, I can picture it.  BUt I'm ver acceptable to poetry but this is good.

This was beautiful. Oh, the release dreams can offer us! But alas! We must wake...yet be joyous in the thought that will can always return to dreams at the end of the day...or anytime in between for that matter. I liked this a lot. Very descriptive. I also loved the ending. Twas my fav. line!

Wow...I'm pretty much speechless.(and trust me, this doesn't happen a lot.)

I liked the feeling of this.  You really know how to manipulate the pace to accent your words.

It was a very good write.  Thank you for sharing this one.

Oooh you seem to now your stuff when it comes to open form poetry. I really liked this, it just had a profesional feel to it.

"pavement.  The day must rest.  I heal,
forget, shade my mind from drudgery,
bosses, friends.  I put slumber to staff
meeting, deadlines, income tax.  My"

My favourite lines, i liked how you mentioned all the bland everyday problems you leave behind when you sleep.

"walls of waves...Suddenly, line
tightens, rod bends, my hands tremble."

Intense imagery.

What i like about this poem is it was enjoyable to read aloud. It was descriptive as well.

More like this please.

Peace.

I agree with SavyAngel & PoeticBlood. I liked it a lot. Keep it up.

This one is for the book. ^_^

Wonderful dream, beautifully told. ~PEACE~