Feb 13 2002 (another oldie from my diary lol)

"Ostracized"

Vacant feelings,
Vagrants reeling,
Shallow Intellect.
All appealing.
You mock,
Discern, deny,
Say its all a lie,
A hypocrisy almost
Of the one true voice
Of legends lost.
Psuedo Christians beware,
God has bought all shares.
To heaven.
He sits on a cloud to watch you all,
Looking at what you were
And what you’ve become
Greed,
Unhappiness,
Selfish pity,
Is that what you’ve amounted to?
The valiant times of old,
Vanished without a trace,
Within the murky conscience of the young.
High hopes, High dreams, High Heels.
What of them?
Needless.
But selfish Vanities rule all.

"High hopes,
High dreams,
High Heels.
What of them?
Needless."

Very powerful line!
Keep it up.

Oops forgot myname.

Very enjoyable. Full of good observation and some interesting imagery. also some good rhyming in there. :) I simply loved the opening.



Very good indeed :)

I loved these lines too..

Nice wake up call. Great job.

lol thanks you guys :) i'm touched lol

i dont ever let my poetry out of my diary let alone let anyone see them so i'm a bit scared lol :) but hey

well i thought i had to go but i have time to reply just to this one, i like the image here and though i know i need to read it a few times to get the meaning which i like it alot.

i dont know what shit i was on but that was just non-sense. i wanted to say taht i like that you wrote with a vision and conveyed your thoughts succesfully, i like the taste it has a bit of solid mush ya know, and it seems to have a seroius meaning within it, about things that are real.nice, i told you you were better. i write about silly emotions......

there is nothing silly about writing about emotions :) poetry is the language of the heart.... i write about languid stuff :devil:

With each new poem I'mma readin', Kaye, ya keep sooprizing me! **thumbs up**

I'm with ballsy Paulsy here, the opening was superb!



You need to write and post more!

MORE!

MORE!

MORE!

MOREEE!

aww thanks abba :) my ego just went from here _ to here * :)

your comments are very much appreciated you guys :flowers:

sad but true i like the way you put it needless..

katie me luv, you already know how i feel about this and i think this is your best poem by far.

come and visit me sometime will you? by the way, the moley one says ello

moley's still alive? how old is that damn hamster?! cool! thanks clarke :)

Great poem gurl. You just keep bringing out the goodies don't you. Trying to make me look shithouse. well your doing a good job. Great and powerful poem. I would quote lines but your not allowed to wuote the whole thing. Mwah.

Oh yeagh...........and I agree with Abbs....MORE katey gurl. We want more!

hehe stop filling my ego sarah!! lol thankees muchees :)

and because I have nothing new - this can be my contribution to the book lol

So we get something 4 years old? Oh kaye!

Yes it's very good :P

be thankful adzley!! heh.