Title: La Réflexion de la Lune
Theme: Nature
Date: November 19 2002
Author: Janis Petersen


the moon,
often eclipsed by the fiery beauty of the sun,
shines on me tonight.
cricket quartets play their orchestrated melodies,
harmonizing
on the cool breeze which
sends my short black tresses tumbling down
around my face,
caressing my flushed porcelain cheeks.
the grass acts as a plush green carpet
as my soul soars high,
flying
floating
dancing on the wind.
eyes, set as dusky sapphires, glow brightly as
they gaze at the moon's
translucent beauty.
perhaps Luna's attraction is her simplicity
the soft lullaby she sings
as opposed to the
brilliant flamboyance of her celestial sister
the sun.
she is a softer, gentler giant
whose radiant glow soothes my aching heart
with its celestial kiss.
In her rough surface I see not a man,
but rather a woman
with her every flaw and imperfect nuance
creating a being of
undeniable beauty.
dans la réflexion de la lune,
je me vois.

Beautifully descriptive, enjoyed your imagery and flow. Should this be in Nature? Moonlit caresses and celestial kisses evoke a certain sensuality of a private moment. Well done.

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Gasp!
It was beautiful! I've been wanting to read something so beautiful lately and this did it. :D
I loved it all!
SYOTOS,
Lyra

The words speak to each other and together, soar.
While metaphor is considered the life-blood of poetry, I believe
the personification of the moon is sufficiently metaphorical.
One of the finest free verse poems I have read here
and certainly a top candidate for showcase.
It has drama, uses the language artfully, and arranges
it meaningfully.
Would make one minor change:
"she is a softer, gentle giant"
she is a softer, gentler giant
or she is a soft and gentle giant
to keep the adjectives parallel in construction.
Great work!
I will definitely be on the lookout for your poetry in the future.
-cd

very nice work you have here.

thanks to all of you....
oh, cd, i made that minor change.. makes it sound and look much better.. thanks so much, hun.

WOW, is all that i can say hear. Ive been reading so much good poetry since ive been here, but i must say this has blown my mind more than anything i have read yet. My new fav! Wonderfull poem, simply wonderfull! Gotta go read this again.......

i definately agree with don, the discription of words u use are amazing. i love it

this poem required 5 re reads... it was that good i hadta keep re reading it - by far the best poem i've read on here :) well done jinjan!

off to the showcase you go!!!

thanks kate.. this is my favoritist new poem of mine.. *grins*