No Peace
By D Best
© 2002
Theme - Sad

Daddy looks nonchalantly
with his prematurely wrinkled body
I see his stoic blue eyes - Yet
he screams at me

Mother waits akimbo
I hear the utter of his name
Their LOVE, once solid now gone
Still, she pampers me

Seconds, minutes, hours, days
Time must be grasped
Wishful thinking of Peace and Dignity
Last moments of Pure Hope ?

So we wait - Patiently beyond time
Visions of Hope float to Heaven
Like a Hot-Air Balloon; Up High
Leaving us.. only rainbows..

Vivid colors in the sky
Yet nothing particularly changes
Life is never really Sane
Peace Happens - Just Elsewhere...

This is a nice little piece...you seemed to have packed a lot in a few stanzas...

I smiled at this stanza...

"Mother waits akimbo
I hear the utter of his name
Their LOVE, once solid now gone
Still, she pampers me"

it was almost like a song...

Chavez

Thanks for your input!! Sometimes I don't get any at all !!

Mindracer does it again...each stanza is a vivid emotional snapshot, but the last one brings it all home in breathtaking fashion...
I'm sending hopes that peace will happen to you.

Wow. An amazing piece of writing as a whole, I can't even pick a favourite line because everthing just fits together so well. I too, hope you gain your peace.

Ahh, thanks so much.. I was really hoping more for peace between my Mom and Dad.. however it is over now !! 40 Years together they had, it is now dissolved.. and my father is no longer my father ( His choosing not mine )
Thanks so much all for your enlightened reviews !!

For the book.

a grand addition to the book......

Thanks so Much Savy and darkangeltears...

I am ecstatic about this and appreciate your feedback !!!!

I have been trying to make progress, and by my poem being in the book it inspires me to continue writing.

Once again thanks for all your time and support !!! :biggrinbounce: :boldyellow:

My friend...
there is so much pain in this!
You find a way to touch a soul!
Well done!
Bill

Bill, Thanks for all your encouragement !!!