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falcon
**Its a bit long but if I need a few oppinions on this one. :)**

Act I

8:30 is too early
but I rise
And proceed to sing in the artificial rain.
Back into the desert.
I frown
But the girl in the mirror smiles.
"Emotion displays better when its been wrapped in plastic "
she explains

I dress and head for the stairs.
I don't trip down them this time.

Skipping through the most important meal of the day,
while nibbling on ice. I'm not quite as hungry anymore.

Act II

Hidden
Under
A $10 white T-shirt
We don't sell French fries here,
But popcorn we do.
That'll be $0.50 please
Thank you ma'am and please,
Have a better day than I had yesterday. ( Scars are only skin deep,
but bruises,
those are like memories. )

Pizza= $1.00
Soda= $.55
Soft Pretzel- $.50
With cheese- $.75
Ice-cream- $1.25
Us- $2.49
Without me- Priceless

It's all ready 4:00 you say?
Can't forget to clock out

Act III

Home and half-asleep
Sinking, but this time weightless. I don't always have to be tied down.
I'm gone, to the place I've never visited
in the evening hours
but instead, I waste the daylight on nightmares.
The phone rings.
We talk
And then slowly skirt around the awkward silences
the way a wolf might glide around its prey.
But my lips have no intention of compromise
and your ears slowly fade away.
Conversations end with more difficulty this way.

Act IV

3 hours later...

My eyes are moist,
I can't tell you why
but my eyelashes are crusty
and my fingertips taste of salt.
It's darker now
As the evening sky applies its nighttime makeup
and as I wash mine off.
There's no more mystery around my eyelids
only pale skin above chapped cheeks.

It's almost 12 hours later
and the girl in the mirror has stopped smiling
but she won't frown.
Damn pride.
"The shows still going"
she whispers.
I turn out the light and walk down the hall.

Act V

The phone is silent.
"Where's your strength now?"
It taunts
I'm sick,
waiting for what seems to be nothing leaves me with a stomachache.
The dial tone issues a tune
as I bring the cordless to my ear.
The melody is accompanied by lyrics.
"You're too late. Too late."
My grasp falters,
and the phone falls asleep in its cradle.

I head to my room.
Now I lay me down to sleep...
but my pillow's still damp
I can't tell you why
But my eyelashes are clear for the moment
And my fingertips are tasteless.

Drifting...

Act VI

It's the dead of night,
And silence consumes the helpless.
I am helpless
And I start to fall

But somewhere
Miles away
Or perhaps just in the next room
The phone rings.
Screaming through the deaf and dying air.
I do not move. And minutes
And hours later
the phone joins in with the others buried here.
now my eyes are wet
I cannot tell you why
But my eyelashes will be crusty tomorrow morning
and if I can somehow find a way to move an arm to wipe away the tears,
my fingertips will again taste of salt.
silentaurora
i dont know why, but i really like this. maybe it's the different layout. i've never seen a poem in acts. maybe it's the really vagueness, like we're supposed to know what you're talking about so you dont have to explain some things... but somehow it really appeals to my mind. i can see everything that you are saying, and ... haha yea. i like it, but that's just me. good job!
falcon
Thank you for your reply Silentaurora. I'm glad you got that impression. The vaugeness was one of the things I was going for. Kinda like a fill in the blank thing. Thanks again for responding and actually reading it since it was so long.:)
SavyAngel
Whoa...this is...wow. I really and truly like this one. I can see why it's in the book. This is amazingly good falcon. I'm serious too. I cannot say what all I liked about it b/c it would take forever. There is just too much here to like. Wow. I am truly impressed. Bravo, hun, bravo.
falcon
*blushes* Thanks for taking the time to read this Savy. :)
SavyAngel
It was definately my pleasure. This was fantastic!
SailorStar16
I agree too! this was fantastic, I mean, wonderful! KEEP IT UP!!
thinkin
you've reminded me why i'm in constant awe of you...anything more i could say would be a travesty:))~
falcon
Thanks for the comments SS16 and thinkin. :) I'm glad you guys like this one.
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