Bloody Kiss
Jul 2 2002, 10:47 PM
Temptation's Craze
By Monica Lawless
Unknown Date
Theme - Misc
Saunter through a time-warped phase
Carried in and out of child to adult daze
Where did loss of innocence befall?
Warped illusion
Need for conclusion
Doubtful in sort of way; invisibly linger
Betray values taught alongside chastity?
Closed eyes; concealed
Here to there
Lifes not fair
Somehow entering in
Thoughts of temptation's craze
Faults with choosing
This or that?
Who and what?
Why?
Screams break cages with bloody fingernails
Enter into a reality unknown; solitarily
Instincts
Hope dies last
SavyAngel
Jul 4 2002, 07:52 PM
I honestly cannot put my finger on what I like about this poem. I did like your internal rhyming in places, and just the sheer irony of some of the lines within the poem. This is pretty cool...dark as hell...but cool.
Welcome to FC. ^_^
Blind Lover
Jul 27 2002, 05:24 PM
Sorry I havent replied before, But this is great. I love it. I think that you have real talent and I am glad this one got moved to the book.
sidewinder
Aug 3 2002, 07:42 AM
There is a sadness in this !
But the internal rhythm in this is well done !
Bill
mylittlemoshpit
Aug 3 2002, 08:10 PM
this is awesome. i love the abstract style.
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