Long Beach Poetry Reading


I must enjoy all this I told myself
The crowded room and home pressed books
And everyone knows everyone

I smoked my cigarette and listened
Something about misenchanted and Pablo
And is there such a word as misenchanted?

Reaching for that final acceptance
With these low lights, wooden stage and cold booze
We all wish we were better

I write for myself and it angers these “poets”
But like this second drink
It lifts my spirits

And the feeling I tell myself
Of college bred poets and young girls in love
It does little for me

But I must like all of this I told myself
Sucking ass and shaking hands
Even if I don’t know anyone

3/9/01

This seemed a little awkward compared to everything else you have posted. I'm not sure why it seems awkward either. Hmm, I'm really perplexed cause I can't put my finger on why this just doesn't sit. Maybe its just me, oh knews, eh? hehe.

Thank You Eveng,

It just goes to show that one mans ceiling is another ones floor...this was included in a bunch of pieces that I sent to a friend of mine for his quarterly chapbook and this was the one he chose for the print...I, like you don't think it's that great, but he seemed to like it...

To each his own...I guess.

Chavez

I write for myself and it angers these “poets”
But like this second drink
It lifts my spirits

I think these are the best lines in the poem. They posses great exprression. This poem is filled with imagery that makes the reader aware of your surroundings as the poem is read. I agree with Evengiliana this is quite different from your other poems...but it is atill a poem written in the moment...as all of your poems seem to be. You begin the poem expressing how you love being there...the atmosphere and the fact that you knwo everyone, then as the poem progresses you admit that you dislike it and don't know a soul..it's as if your saying you only there so your not alone? I don't know...just what I picked up????? All in all I liked it.
Sarah xo

Thank you Sarah,

Hey, I went out on a date this weekend with a Sarah!!



What I like about posting my writing is that after some time you beging to get a sence of what others are thinking overall...it is interesting that peoples comments begin to form a pattern...

Slices of time in the life is very important to me...if there was only a camera that could capture moments with words...

Thanks Sarah

This was a little different from your other poems but nontheless excellent!




I also liked your comment.

Keep on trucking.

Wow, this is good. This is really pretty good. I truly enjoyed the description of the wood, the lights, including the booze. The image you protray is very friendly. It's also nice that you question your worth as a poet in comparison the the college bred poets. There is alwasy that insecurity of wondering, maybe they really do see something I can't.

I would like to suggest that you check out some Richard Hugo. I know in one of my middle to early posts on this site I paced two pieces by him on the site. They are both very good.

This is damn good if you ask me. I am putting it in the book. Good job, hun. *applauds*

hey,

Thanks a lot savy...

I look forward to the book...

Chavez

I like this piece, but I have to disagree with John on the line about 'college-bred poets.' It seems to me that the line is focusing more on the writer feeling somewhat amused by the college-bred poets. I definitely didn't get any sense of inferiority or insecurity from that line. I got the impression that the writer saw himself as not above that style of writing, but simply having moved beyond it. Just my $.02.

Shiara