My Wishes

It's so plain to see, that
My wishes go unnoticed,
Never will one come true.
Only a few things I desire, but
Those things seem too much to ask.
Can't anyone understand?
How I wish one wish would come true, yet
Reality hits hard.
I will never receive any
Something that I want.

does anyone respond to poetry here or what?

Sorry, I am usually really good about responding, but this past weekend has been really busy for me, so I let some of my reading slide.  This is a pretty good start, but you do have a couple rough places.  Try reading it out loud to yourself to help you find what needs to be smoothed out ;)

I have read some of your sad poems and figure this,
You got a serious case of teenage angst.

Believe it or not, you are not alone.  Keep writing and working through the rough spots.  Writing does help and you seem to have a way with expressing yourself.

hehe, yeah, I guess you do in your writing at least.  Listen: life isn't as bad as you or Bob think it is.  


and imagery would help this one too.

this was one of my poems with a hidden phrase/word in it, I did three or four of them, and realized it made the poem really awkward. See if you can find the secret message, if you haven't already.