Vulnerable
By Sheena Call
© June of 2000
Theme - Love

In the late of night
When all the world doth sleep
I remain awake
Hath I been forgotten
By the gentle sandman?
Nay, my mind does say
My eyes become foggy and unclear
Past sorrows
Mixed with sudden weariness
Induce this state of altered sight
My lover
Looking as an angel
As he rest his sweet head
Upon my shoulder
And continues with his slumber
Soft angel...
Calling in the night
With your gentle breathing
Lull my soul to bed and rest
Sweet lover...
Dare I say
I love thee?
Dare I allow myself
To become that vulnerable?
But aye
Thou doth sleep so soundly
In a lover’s gaze
I see this true
You cannot hear me
Aye
Tis true
I will be this
Vulnerable
The heart's will becomes easy
When you are not being heard
By mindful ears
But nay,
What if thee are only
Pretending
That thou art asleep
Should I still remain unarmed?
Amorous
Indeed thine heart is
I cast my eye across
Your sleeping face
My finger tips along
Your velvety lips
How darest I say
What I feel in my
Soul to be truth?
Please let me be pardoned
For making myself
Vulnerable to you
For I simply cannot
Keep my cool composure
Any longer than now
I love thee
I am dropping my guard
I love thee
These words must have
Clicked in your
Unmindful ears
You stir
And I freeze
Have I said too much?
Have you heard me?
Your exotic eyes open
As mine blur even more
Your seductive smile,
The one that captures my
Heart
Every time you use it,
Appears across your face
Though I can not see well
Through the blurring
Of thine eyes
I know you heard
The utterance
Of my lips
Perhaps I was wrong
In becoming
Vulnerable to thee
Your eyes,
The color of envy,
Yet lies no envy in your heart,
Gaze upon my hazy figure
The smile that seduces me
Falls from your lips
As they dance across mine
Without hesitation,
A soft utterance from your lips
“I love thee”
“...I love thee...”

:: wow, thatis really long.  I can imagine the feelings that inspired such a piece were strong ones.  I like this one, it's a feeling that most people can definetly relate too.  nice job!

Cam

i liked the style you adopted for this poem, the old english that was used, i felt like half way you stopped and it thinned out and could have been used a bit more.


you used Vunerable twice there and it sounded a bit repetitive where the rest of the poem wasn't, just my opion. nice work

I adore this poem. It honestly brought tears to my eyes. I am still smiling. Twas a truly beautiful piece and the old English was great. It's been a long time since I read a poem such as this. This was a truly powerful piece. I do agree with Chelle though. The word vulnerable twice in that line was a little too repetitive.

You know, I was searching for my favorite line in this poem, even my favorite few lines, and do you know what? I cannot find one or a few. I liked this whole piece, and I cannot break it apart to decide which part is the best or my fav. This whole piece was good. Bravo. :)

Perhaps this change will suit you better.  

I have always been wary of those two lines ever since I wrote this piece a couple years ago, but no one ever seemed to think I change it.  I am just glad someone - two someones! - finally thought so too.
Thanks guys!!

Lol. I like that line much better. :) Congrats.

:) i like that much better it flows easier over the mind

very well done !
The feelingsthat you convyed here were beauiful !
Bill