1.
you hug me goodbye
your hand rubbing my back
I think, "I love you."
I hold those words on my lips
they aren't allowed any more

2.
at night I fell asleep
reaching for you
hands don't understand...
this morning, I wake
reaching for you again

3.
you call me, just to
tell me you can't talk today
maybe tomorrow...
we could love again, no you
only said to meet for coffee

That's so sad..but sweet.  I like how you put this part:  "I think, "I love you."
I hold those words on my lips"


Good stuff.

I love that poem! I felt that way towards this one guy  (its been about 6 years that I've been in love with him) about 7 months ago, he walked away from me. I'm still trying to move on, but its very hard. Now I'm dating someone, and I still remeber the hurt and pain that one guy brought me, and its messing up my relationship with my boyfriend. So I write poetry about how I felt, and now I'm going to put it on this website. I hope you guys like it. It came from my heart.

I think that a lot of people who have been hurt or that they feel this way about a person could really relate to this poem. I mean even I could relate to it with one of my relationships that I've had. It sounds just like that in a way.

All in all... it's a good poem. Keep 'em coming! :)

Oh btw the title fits this poem really well.

Sorry, just had to respond. I like your writing style. It's interesting. Sounds like simple thought process. It's very cool. This was a very sad piece,and I really cannot think of much to improve upon it or change about it. I liked this phrase though:



That line stood out the most to me in the entire poem. It reminds me of your signature. I liked the personification here. Very cool.

Btw, I love your signature. PN is one of my favorite writers. The lines you quoted are from my favorite poem actually.  :D Good job and welcome to the site.

I too had a very close call with the guy I love recently. This poem truly explains how I felt then. How sometimes you want to say something, but you can't, and sometimes you want/need something you can't have. And then I wonder, is it truly better to have loved and lost then never to have loved at all?

I agree with Savy, the way you wrote this was really neat.  And I think it worked well with the message you wanted to convey.  Great job!

Thank you all for your responses, they are all very much appreciated.  :)

ohh, this poem made me feel bad...i just broke up with someone and he tries to make me feel sorry for him....this is how he'd do it, but it's a beautiful poem, really

i like this style! i have never been one to be able to write very abstract like this nor have i been one to write very much about love, i like the way it was broken into parts 1, 2 and 3. for me also



stood out but maybe for a diffrent reason, i at first had the image of him sayign to to you 'i think i love you' i think it was you puinctuation. the way it worked in with the next line was great though and cleared that up maybe:

As I think, "I love you."
I hold those words on my lips

letting the reader know that your thinking it straight out ( maybe it was just me lol )

anyway you have some great emotion here and i enjoy your style

Wonderful. I love it, its both hurt and carring at the same time.

I have to agree with Savy about that line. There is something about it that just rings so true and has such a deep meaning. Altogether it's a very moving poem and I personaly wouldnt change a thing aboutit. Keep posting cause if the rest of your work is this good, then ti cant wait to read more.

I loved it you did a wonderful job. I also have to agree with savy about that one line. Keep it up.

Since everyone loved this one, it's going in the book as well.