theme - angry
title - forgotten
date - 6/6/03
name - Amanda Kretzer


it's so hard holding back,
my heart wants to break free,
but then again i'm ONLY your girlfriend,
guess it's ok to forget me.

it's not like i have feelings,
these tears don't mean a thing.
i like to have my heart broken,
i enjoy the pain you bring.

standing in a puddle,
where my confidence leaked through.
forgotten i will remain,
because i'm JUST a girlfriend...
thats's all i am to you :crying: :crying:

I like the sarcasm this piece has in it. It's really great how I can feel the emotions.
If you polish it up a bit I think this will be a great piece.

thanx for the good words. I know i can write a lot better than this but i was REALLY pissed to the point where i couldn't think straight. ~Blah~

mandy!!

I love your sarcastic second stanza. that's fabulous. good write, Mandy.

i love this. absolutely adore it. ive been through this before and you have captured the idea perfectly. nicely done and the images you use are beautiful. and unlike what kate suggested, i think leaving it how it is is just perfect. i loved it how it is. it has a certain character to it that a polished piece wouldnt have. i feel that if you polish it, youll loose some of the feeling and sarcasm. i really like this and with your permission, id like to put this in the forum set asside for poems going into our second book. this is excellent.

geez - thanx for the good words you guys. i really didn't think anybody would respond to this piece . You have my permission to do what ever you'd like with my poem as long as it stays in my name. :flowers:

thank all of ya'll for paying attention to my writings and taking the time to drop a few lines, it really means something to me.

mandy!!

Wow...I absolutely love this poem, I have to say. The sarcastic tone works sooo well to show how angry and hurt this guy has made you. I absolutely love the sarcasm, hehe. I reckon it would make any guy wince when aimed at them. Unless they're total heartless bastards of course. I showed it to a friend of mine, it made him wince when he read it, he said it felt like a kick in the balls, almost. Which in other words means it's absolutely fantastic :D hehe. Great job, sweetie.

And don't worry, all poems published in our Drytear books are kept in your name :)

thanx Phoenix for the compliment. It feels good to know that somebody pays attention to your poetry. I think it's funny b/c i wasn't going to post this poem. To me it's one of those poems you write to let your feelings out and then ball it up and throw it away. But i was bored and i noticed that i hadn't posted i awhile so i figured i'd put it on here. Anyways, sorry for blabbin. Thanks again.

mandy!!

oh Mandy honey, you never throw those poems away. those are the most emotion-packed, best pieces of work. one thing i've noticed is when i post a really polished piece that i've worked and reworked, people don't respond half as much as they do when i've scribbled something out in a fit and not looked at it again, except to post it. emotion goes a LONG way, and i'm so happy this was moved. i was thinking about doing it myself. I love it. congrats!