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Adam
As the iced breeze crosses the rain,
God's light in aligned men,
I can see you in the twilight,
Give me reality,

Give him breathing in his sleep,
Colouring blindless,
Bitter rashes of choking,

Heaven holds a sense of wonder,
I get colder as she cries more,
Comfort in need,

Giving into the earth,
As the silence begins,
We all reach out for that hunger,

I'm wanting to believe,
As the world subsides,
The only sacrifice,
In the rage over the sun.
shamespite
Then imagery is priceless. Once again a wonderful piece Adam.
Fave lines:
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Give him breathing in his sleep,
Colouring blindless,
Bitter rashes of choking,

The way that the title was the last line of the poem was also a great touch. I really enjoyed reading this.

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Kuwdora
So..mystical. Seems unreal, but very sad (at least that's how I'm feeling it.. *shrug?*)

The entire thing is so beautiful, I don't know what to say -- which you know, obviously, reading my other replies to your other poems.

These two verses are my favorite, because they are interlaced together so well

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Heaven holds a sense of wonder,
I get colder as she cries more,
Comfort in need,

Giving into the earth,
As the silence begins,
We all reach out for that hunger,


Heaven.. Earth.. Yes. Very pretty, verry sad. I like.
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