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We were drunk
like always And out of weed So my brother and I started hitting resi out of my bubbler You couldn't get a hit So I filled it up for you And you cleared the smoke That's when you gave me that look like you were impressed or turned on or trying to figure me out The look that made me feel sexy and significant every time And when we went to bed Drunk and stoned and losing ourselves in sex I believed everything you told me This post has been edited by ignorethemeter: Feb 9 2010, 05:25 AM -------------------- Rules for writers
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 one by one the penguins slowly steal my sanity  Group: Management Posts: 14,913 Joined: 27-September 02 From: North Carolina Member No.: 1,039 Zodiac: Cancer |
ahh drunken sex, one of the best kinds!
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 Splendor Spring Group: Advanced Member Posts: 534 Joined: 12-August 03 From: Somewhere in this world. Member No.: 1,964 Zodiac: Leo |
 This hot poem reminds me of an old spanish saying that goes like this. Una noche de copa, una noche loca. Which mean a night of cup & a night crazy. The translation may not make much sense in english, but I'll make it clearer for you all. A night of drinking to much cups liqour, leads to a night of crazy passion. 
-------------------- *~ Love Will Tear Us Apart ~* When routine bites hard, And ambitions are low, And resentment rides high, But emotions won't grow, And we're changing our ways, Taking different roads. Then love, love will tear us apart again. Love, love will tear us apart again. Why is the bedroom so cold? You've turned away on your side. Is my timing that flawed? Our respect runs so dry. Yet there's still this appeal That we've kept through our lives. But love, love will tear us apart again. Love, love will tear us apart again. You cry out in your sleep, All my failings exposed. And there's a taste in my mouth, As desperation takes hold. Just that something so good Just can't function no more. But love, love will tear us apart again. Love, love will tear us apart again. Love, love will tear us apart again. Love, love will tear us apart again. By: Joy Division |
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QUOTE (cattieos @ Feb 9 2010, 09:59 AM)  ahh drunken sex, one of the best kinds! cat....is there any other kind of sex....LOL......Blessed Be, Patrick |
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Feb 12 2010, 12:40 AM
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 Advanced Member Group: Advanced Member Posts: 341 Joined: 16-July 09 From: Georgia Member No.: 5,292 Zodiac: Taurus MySpace Page |
Really enjoyed the form here, my sister had a bubbler and it was excellent, also curious about the implications of the last line, nice.
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Feb 14 2010, 10:06 AM
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QUOTE (Lowrye @ Feb 11 2010, 06:40 PM) Really enjoyed the form here, my sister had a bubbler and it was excellent, also curious about the implications of the last line, nice. Thanks all for the kind words and the attention you've paid to this poem. Bubblers are great aren't they? The one I'm talking about here has three chambers actually; it's mind-boggling. And you're right, as far as I'm concerned, the whole poem is in the last line. -------------------- Rules for writers
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